got some feedback from my tutor

got my feedback on my dissertation so far. when i handed it in i had only done 1600 words so their wasnt much to mark then. He graded is a D+ so far. He gave me some pointers and tips on how to improve my dissertation they where:

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You may wish to refine your question as to period of time and location, are you looking a the use of steroids in Britain

There is a structure which relies on both primary and secondary research and has a clear progression throughout the paper, are you looking mainly at young men and gym culture as going into the world of sports may be too broad. You can mention sports but this may as way of introducing how the drugs have become popular or been developed.

There is currently very little reflection in your paper, you need to say why the steroid are used and what has happened in culture, body awareness and other factors which you feel are contributing to the facts. Try to keep a distance from the subject, do not become too biased to a particular side and present both cases. Steroids are they harmful, if not why does the government or the media portray them as such?

You need to reference all your sources and when making comments or discussing steroids state where you obtained the information. Please use the Harvard system of referencing and connect with your bibliography

There is only three weeks till the deadline and although you are working on the project you need to finish a complete draft by the end of next week and then review and refine. Please not all planning in your progress map

so i need to get my entire dissertation complete by next Thursday. so that in the 2 weeks remaining i can refine my essay and make it much better for the reader. So far ive done 3800 words so im close to half way.